Triangle Partner Help

Henry:

If people would give up on being cool and their need for attention, then they can slowly drift away from it; no longer depending on it like a drug.

Everyone needs attention but if this need for attention cause us to perform in a way in which we do not know how to perform it, then we should give up trying to get that attention. In your example of the guy who was losing public favors, he could not maintain being the cool guy because he did not know what was cool now and at that point, he should give up trying to get the attention. Cool cannot be controlled so we should not try to control it and try to use it to our advantage. By giving up on being cool, we would not need to "bite" people and expose our uncoolness. Trying too hard to be cool is in fact uncool and will hurt one's own identity so it is better not to try too hard.

I feel that your second paragraph does not necessarily prove your thesis; it talks about college recommendations and how cool comes in handy but it does not talk about how or why we should not pay so much attention to cool. Maybe you can give an example of someone who is cool without trying too hard and how that worked out for that person.

Rachel:

Sounds like being cool is to be accepted by others, to become materialistic, and to use our bodies to meet our cultural standards.

Your paper questions what is cool and points out that people have different perspectives on cool; consequently, there are different definitions of cool. One way to fit into our cultural standards and get others to approve us using methods of adorning is to get tattoos. Getting tattoos allow us to meet our cultural standards because our standards tell us to be the one in power and tattoos make us feel power over something (our bodies). While our cultural standards also tell us to become materialistic, companies reinforce this idea by selling us products that seem cool. We all follow our cultural map's meaning of cool and if one's map says to get good grades and go to college, then that will seem cool to one. And if our cultural map does not include getting good grades and going to college, then it will prevent us from doing so. There is no "real" self; we are all put into categories created by society even before we are brought into the world. We have to act accordingly to what our "script" (given to us by society) says and therefore we cannot be "ourselves." Our cultural map shapes what we think is cool, corporations drill the characteristics of cool into our heads, and then make us buy their cool products.

I would say connect your paragraphs back to your thesis; everytime I finish reading a paragraph, I forget the thesis >_<. In reference to the paragraph about the corporations, I think the corporations ARE evil for manipulating people regardless if manipulation is part of the economic system. I think that the last paragraph could become your conclusion. And I think we are supposed to conceal our identity... so... the last names.....